At dVerse Linda is hosting Open Link Night, when we post our own choice of poem.
dVerse Poets – Open Link Night
“The years are too short, the days are too long.” Joseph Heller
In The Crush The day's tide elongated my hours like thick, slow squeezed lemon, the juice of a day in the crush of a hand now flexed and dripping. Like thick, slow squeezed lemon with a mess of acid citrus down, a hand now flexed and dripping so much a tap of flowing water. With a mess of acid citrus down, the day simply drizzled along, so much a tap of flowing river along the moments so tart and, The day simply drizzled along, the juice of a day in a crush of, along the moments so tart and, the day's tide elongated my hours. ©Paul Vincent Cannon
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Time is indeed so RELATIVE lemon 🍋! So distant October yet so close March. Once the sour juice is out, (sigh) it feels good. Lovely poem ☺️
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Wow
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Thank you so much Susan.
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Paul, we’ve all had days like this! 🙂 So well expressed. I can almost taste the lemon! ❤ Hope today is better!
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Much better 🙂 thank you Cheryl.
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Paul I love this! The pantoum is one of my favorite forms.
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I thought I recognized the pantoum! (It’s still relatively new to me.)
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So many variations too, well minor variations in the western form. I love it as a form.
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Thank you so much Linda, so glad you loved it, I too love the form, a real challenge.
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Yes, it is.
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Excruciatingly accurate, Paul.
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Thank you Sandy, nice to know it connects – even though the feeling is not positive.
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It sure does.
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I have never attempted a pantoum … yours has set a high bar, a very high bar! Cheers.
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Very kind indeed, thank you so much Helen.
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Today I learn something new in poetry and yes some days are pure acidic.
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Yes, they sure can be a few of those. Thank you Rupali.
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Beautifully penned Paul. I’m actually eating Gulab Julam (i think I’m saying that right) so sweet and delightful in honor of Diwali and my mouth literally puckered when I read your poem. 🤣 I missed my lemon water today for a change but I trust there’s so bitter reminders so I’ll keep away from the news.. lol. have a good one. ❤️ Cindy
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Thank you very much for sharing a slice of your day and Diwali too – enjoy. 🙂
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You are so welcome Paul! Hope you liked my little celebration of Diwali on Fun Fri-Yay. Have a great weekend! ❤️❤️✨✨✨✨✨
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I sure did 🙂
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oh good!
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The day simply drizzled along,…… love that line
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Many thanks Debi, much appreciated. I have days that sometimes feel like those slow dull drizzly days.
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“The juice of a day in the crush of a hand” about describes the day I’ve had. And elongated for sure . . .
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Sounds like you’re in a grind of day?
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I love this juicy write!
Anna :o]
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🙂 I love that response, thank you Anna
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“The day simply drizzled along, the juice of a day in a crush of,”… love this! Stellar writing here 😀
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Sanaa, thank you very much indeed. I was reflecting on one of those days which I gather we all seem to have now and again 🙂
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I love this style of poem
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Such a fun form.
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I never gotten into poetry until now and you do such a marvelous work when it comes to poetry😉Thank you for sharing your thoughts😇
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I am absolutely delighted to have had that affect, wow, thank you for sharing how it has impacted you.
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Reblogged this on The Reluctant Poet.
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🙂
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😁✨👍
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