Peter at dVerse is hosting Meeting The Bar and his invitation is to write a poem based around sounds.
dVerse Poets- Meeting The Bar – Let your words ring out
“I’ll have what she’s having” (cafe patron played by Estelle Reiner) ‘When Harry Met Sally’
Rumbling Stiletto staccato on platform five invites leather soul antiphon, an echo of his quiet love quickening her pulsing temple oblivious to the bustle of the milling crowd passing in the shadows, oblivious to the hum in this nest of hulking, clanking metallic beasts whose breath shouts for presence, aware only of reaching into each other with shivering groans, the whole place rumbling as they filled its emptiness, she smiled, he was confused, he hadn't expected that train to come in. ©Paul Vincent Cannon
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Oh, wow! I could hear each sound.
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I am heartened by that, makes it worth the effort , thank you for sharing that Punam.
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My pleasure, Paul. 🙂
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Love it, the quote and the photo. Such a happy sight!
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You romantic you, but I knew that 🙂 thank you Cheryl, much appreciated.
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And the description of the train!👍🏻
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Ah, which is one of my other passions, trains are amazing.
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Oh, oh,…then who was he expecting.
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Well, he wasn’t expecting her to respond so strongly, it’s as if a train had rumbled in 🙂
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The best kind!
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Ah, spoken like a true romantic, but a grounded one.
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A passionate feast of sound and texture – Who could ask for anything more? Well done.
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Dora thank you, I love your response.
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Nice way to end your passion play.
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🙂 that was a train worth waiting for. Thank you Lisa.
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🙂
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Well done. The power of the arriving train carries right into the reunion.
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Well said, yes indeed, and thank you Ken.
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Laughing here. Such a fine (and being an old cynic) surprising end to this fine piece Paul. And the sounds! – it’d be half the poem without the – staccato shouts hulking, shivering, rumbling, clanking’ – great stuff.
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Many thanks Peter, I was getting worried I might have overdone it, but I let it sit and went with it. I really enjoyed this one.
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Lovely! It reminded me of waiting for my husband’s ship to arrive at Pier 12 after a seven-month Med cruise. Different sounds, but similar feeling.
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I get that, separation makes the liminal moment more poignant, thank you for the vulnerable response Liz.
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You’re welcome, Paul.
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I am a hopeful romantic😉
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I like that you are, we need more hopeful romantics.
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Well said, Paul! Really loved the “When Harry Met Sally” quote!!
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Such a great moment in the movie, and thank you Chuck.
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My goodness this is good! I love the use of sounds here so expertly wrought in each line 😀
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Thank you so much Sanaa, I so enjoyed response. 😀
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Dora said it well! What goes on in railway stations … 😉
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Always the possibility of going off the rails 🙂
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lol well that would certainly be entertaining for the other waiting passengers 😉
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Lol, might have to have rated platforms 🙂
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🙂
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I love the sound around them, but they’re in their own world within. I can picture this scene so well.
And the opening quote, so funny because you can’t help but think about that scene in the movie. 😀
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I still laugh every time I think of that scene. Many thanks Merril, I love your response.
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You’re welcome! 🤣
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I love the sounds of the train station… it sounds a bit like it used to do when I went there as a kid… I feel it’s less noisy these days.
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Yes, I’m glad for the environment, but I miss diesel and steam, those beasts were so alive, thank you Bjorn.
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A very romantic one. Thank you, Paul! We often do not expect the Good Bye. Michael
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Or that passionate hello, and public space is so awkward.
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Love your use of words in this poem
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So glad you liked that.
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Superbly written and touching. Thank you for posting this.
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Thank you so much Geri.
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