dVerse Poets – Poetics – Come Sail
Sarah at dVerse has invited us to write a poem about boats of any type.
“The way of a canoe is the way of the wilderness, freedom almost forgotten.” Sigurd F. Olson
In The Wake The dolphins are laughing while the grebe casts a wary eye as I cut a swathe through Neptunes land, gently gouging the surface my shoulders sway as the double-ended paddle crosses over, slicing the grey-green expanse, forcing it against itself as a passage of time in the wake of all that is. ©Paul Vincent Cannon
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Beautiful!
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Thank you Lucy, appreciate your thought.
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‘a passage of time in the wake of all that is;’
I can hear the splash of the paddles and the opening up of that passage. Lovely.
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Nothing like it, it really is as you say, thank you Jane.
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🙂
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My sister and husband kayak in Vermont and Maine.
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Such fun.
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Perhaps our journey here is just time pushing against itself as we move across our etherial journey through the passage of time!
Dwight
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Yes, that’s where my thought went as I came to that line, don’t we do that sometimes.
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Yes, very often, I believe!
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And so wonderful too, thank you Dwight.
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soothing afternoon
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Absolutely 🙂
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“forcing it
against itself as a passage of time” Wow what a marvellous metaphor. Lovely poetry ❤
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Very kind, thank you for those encouraging words.
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You’re most welcome.
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To paddle is to breathe!
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So true.
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The last 2 lines are a fantastic comparison!
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Thank you so much
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I love how your paddle “gouges” the surface of the water! And of course the last two lines . . .
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This poem conjures beautiful moments shared in such an amazing pastime – you have captured it perfectly
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Many an hour of joy.
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I love that image of the paddle slicing the water. Kayaks and canoes seem to bring people right into nature. I think you really capture the feeling here.
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Thank you Sarah, and for the prompting too, I do agree wholeheartedly.
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This is so beautiful!
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Beautiful, with the beginning “laughing dolphins” too. Michael
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I love watching them in the river, they come in from the ocean every day.
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Really. What a nice experience.
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Yes, they come up to the paddle boaders, boats and kayaks – very friendly.
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Thats wonderful. Dolphins are very intelligent. We should choose some as our leaders. 😉
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We would do well 😉
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Great! The best one can hear, Paul!
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Absolutely 😉
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slicing the
grey-green expanse, forcing it
against itself as a passage of time
in the wake of all that is.
The passage of time flows swiftly like the water and takes many twists and turns. We need good oars to navigate. Love the flow of your words. Beautifully expressed!
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Thank you, I appreciate your encouraging words, and so glad it spoke in that way, agree too.
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Ah… the freedom. 🙂
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Yes, just love it 🙂
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peaceful paddle, beautiful metaphors and great distance shot
… can’t see your face Paul?
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Ha, at least you see some of me, lol, as for you 🙂
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why sir are you questioning my sunny identity 🙂
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Indeed 😉
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lol my executor has instructions to post my photo and an outline of my ‘story’ after my demise … so hope you outlive me 😉
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🙂 But – we won’t know it is you 🙂
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well if you truly think I would deceive you then I’ll squash that idea … thought you knew me better ..
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I’m getting a closer idea 😀
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i’ve told you anyway, so it wont be anything new 🙂
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😉
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The rhythm of the poem reflects the rhythm of the paddles so well! I feel myself swaying from side to side.
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How wonderful to have felt that, and thank you for the positives.
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It was! Also, the nearest I’ve ever got to a canoe.
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It’s never too late 🙂
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You are a gift with words.
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