Kim at dVerse has invited us to write a prose piece of 144 words using the line “There are moments caught between heartbeats.” from a poem by Louis MacNiece titled ‘Coda.’
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Falling Into You
There are moments caught between heartbeats, just as in those moments of solitude when one questions the point between the inward and outward breath. Or where the water I walked in earlier today, where will it be now? As to pinpointing any definitive moment, well, there is only a kind of knowing by doing, where there arise moments between seeing and feeling. Moments when time falls away and I fall into you and we float so lightly on the energy we so effortlessly generate, lighting our world with a felt glow. for a brief moment time speeds as yet it slows, a quantum of pleasure, like salmon forging upstream, we reach that point of no return, that precipice of tipping where we rise yet descend, and descend yet rise, bathed in an inner sunset, that warm glow between heartbeats falling into you.
ยฉPaul Vincent Cannon
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Hello Paul! I like your posts,
they really have that warm glow in their heartbeat!
A day with lots of inspiration! Thanks!
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Many thanks for your thoughtful and encouraging words.
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the energy created from your words is making me float right now, a very sensual poem about the meeting of souls and a physicality only a real connection can create. I truly loved the flow of your prose poem.
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Well that is so encouraging, thank you so much Gina for this lovely response.
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it was truly such a pleasure
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I agree with Gina about the sensuality of this piece, Paul, which is full of energy and radiates a palpable glow.
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Very kind indeed, thank you Kim – a wonderful prompt to engage with too.
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A glorious moment Paul, and a beautiful concept the describe the moment…”falling into you”….. You had me floating along with every word….
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Well that is wonderful to hear that it had such an effect, and thank you for your thoughtful response Ivor.
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Perfect balance. Lovely words to describe it.
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Thank you so much Jane
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In a distant memory, I remember this – Quantum of pleasure. Find your poetry very fitting.
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I hope it comes back. Thank you so much for sharing your slice of life too.
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This captures that moment of coming together so very delicately and beautifully.
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I often feel it is so much better if it is delicate, I guess my bias is less is more. Thank you for those observations Punam.
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I totally agree, Paul. That’s what I love about your writing. My pleasure. ๐
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Thank you very much Punam ๐
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Lovely words here Paul. I agree- less is more.
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…for a brief moment time speeds as yet it slows, a quantum of pleasure, like salmon forging upstream, we reach that point of no return, that precipice of tipping where we rise yet descend, and descend yet rise, bathed in an inner sunset, that warm glow between heartbeats falling into you.
I really like your ending images in this story!
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Thank you Dwight, so glad you liked that.
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This is such lovely and meditative prose. A pleasure to read.
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Thank you Victoria, thanks for drawing out that affective side.
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Really very meditative and romantic too. Thank you for sharing. Michael
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Many thanks for drawing that aspect out Michael.
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What a wonderful description of how it feels when you are falling in love. Time has a special way of moving when seconds wraps themselves around you, pulling you under.
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Ah yes, so true, pulling you under, nice thought. Yes, time is weird in those moments. Thank you Bjorn, enjoyed your response.
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This is so beautiful, sensual and passionate, poetic prose. Like Bjรถrn said about falling in love and time moving in a special way.
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Yes, I’m intrigued with time, but that’s another day, thank you so much Merril for sharing your thoughts.
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Well, there is only a kind of knowing by doing. I love the truth in this line.
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I often feel we live in our heads, well, men tend to err that way, and I’m captivated by the live it idea. Many thanks for that Astrid.
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This is gorgeous, and the line we had to use was used smoothly, flowing.
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Many thanks Sara, appreciate your encouraging response.
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Reblogged this on The Reluctant Poet.
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Thank for that Charles
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I concur with the comments of your other readers. For me, this was the line that began the flowing into each other: “Or where the water I walked in earlier today, where will it be now?”
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This is so beautiful
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Thank you so much.
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