Ghazal – dVerse Poetry – Poetry Form
The invitation at dVerse is to write a Ghazal, you can learn more by following the link above.
Who?
Pale wings of the ibis so translucent in the light,
who of the gods opened the heavens to light?
No mist in the morning, the warmth means rain,
who closed the windows shuttering all light?
The tavern was crowded with the usual faces,
their sorrows drowned though the beer light.
Canine telegraphs excite across the valley,
who called through the dimming light?
And I, Paul, am surprised tonight,
a wisp of lace, my beloved so light.
©Paul Vincent Cannon
Paul, pvcann.com
Wow! wonderful writing… so nice of you 🌷🙏🌷🙏🌷🙏🙏🌷
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High praise indeed, thank you so much Francis, very kind.
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Most welcome sir🌷🙏🌷🙏🌷🙏🌷
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Beautiful !!!!!!
“And I, Paul, am surprised tonight,
a wisp of lace, my beloved so light.” love it!
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Very kind, thank you so much for sharing that.
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ghazals are difficult. Well done. I wrote one for school back in 2013… maybe I should repost it.
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Thank you Ruth, yes, you must!
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done
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Beautifully structured. Well penned.
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Really appreciate your response, thank you.
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My pleasure
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Fantastic ghazal Paul.
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Thank you so much Linda.
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I love that sudden change in meaning of the word “light” at the end. Nice use of the form here.
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Thank you for your encouraging thoughts Sarah much appreciated.
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Nicely done ghazal, Paul.
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Thank you Punam, appreciate your encouraging words.
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You are welcome.
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I like especially how you describe the sad tavern here, and how in the end you find the light …
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Bjorn thank you very much indeed, yes, finding the light.
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Spot on! I think you not only captured the spirit of the ghazal and its form requirements, you made yours unique, and stamped it as yours. It was a delight to read. Well done!
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Many thanks Gay, I appreciate those encouraging words, I really enjoyed coming to grips with what the form was, a delightful break-out for me.. On a different note – we share the same surname 🙂
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oh ever so sweet “canine telegraphs” … you’ve mastered this form first go 🙂
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Very kind indeed Kate thank you for sharing those encouraging words.
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welcome Paul!
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Well done! You’ve introduced me to a new form, something to play with!
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Very kind Heather, thank you for that, and I hope to your work 🙂
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You’ve captured the poignancy inherent in a ghazal, and beautifully, too.
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Thank for that Dawn, so encouraging.
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You’re welcome, Paul.
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I so admire the concluding couplet with your name and turn to the light.
Thanks for participating in our Poetry Form challenge.
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Thank you and my pleasure – glad to have the opportunity.
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These beautiful poems just seem to roll off your fingertips, whereas I struggle for hours to come up with “There was an old lady from …” 😉
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Well, lately that would be true, I just seem to find the words, hasn’t always been that way though. Don’t give up. And thank you for sharing.
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This is so good — the refrain is perfect in this telling. I loved the first couplet and how it sets the tone along with a striking image of this light.
This is my favourite bit:
“The tavern was crowded with the usual faces,
their sorrows drowned though the beer light.”
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Thank you for sharing that, very much appreciated.
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This is a lovely ghazal. I like how you changed the meaning of light throughout–I particularly like the last couplet.
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Many thanks Merril 🙂
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So lovely. All those unanswered questions except one – your beloved. Very tender.
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Thank you so much LuAnne for reflecting and sharing.
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:-)Fantastic!
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Most kind 🙂
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Lovely in all sorts of ways.
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Many thanks for that Rosemary
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Interesting and enticingly clever
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This was a challenge for sure, thank you.
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Love the “beer light” idea.
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Many thanks Bryan, yes, a twist.
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Very nice Paul. It is always great to be surprised with a light and happy ending!
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Many thanks for that Dwight
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This can be a form that devolves couplets into solitary statements but yours flows and has life, well done!
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Anna, thank you for sharing that, very much appreciated.
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Enjoyed this. The quality of the light changing throughout the poem worked really well.
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Many thanks for that.
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Amazing poem, Paul! I was in love it when I read the first line!
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Thank you so much Eugenia, a wonderful compliment.
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You’re most welcome, Paul.
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